Ok I re-did the prologue based on some of the criticism that I recieved. Let me know if I should still only use it as fuel for a trash can fire in the Den... If the prologue is acceptable I will work on fixing the 1st chapter then. If not well then burn baby burn!! 
PROLOGUE
It never changes. The wastes that is… Seems like everything around you just gave up on life… gave up on trying. Mother earth took its final blow and its heart stopped beating. My name is Jack… just Jack no last name and no legacy behind me. I was born in the New Reno alleys… my mom was a working girl, a Reno whore. She was murdered by a customer right there in front of me after he had his way with her. He let me live, sick bastard got off on me watching my mother die. I’ve been traveling these wastes for 3 years in search off nothing. I left Reno after realizing that there was nothing there for me. I guess I was kind of hoping I’d find something better, but as time passes I gave up on that to. Don’t know how old I am or what year I was born. That kind of stuff just doesn’t hold any meaning in this world anymore. I know I’m younger then most judging by everyone’s crisp radioactive treated skin. I travel with my only companion that I picked up in the beginning of my travels. A half robot half wolf cybernetic dog, a Vault Tek prototype. I call him R.D. because of the faded sign on him “Robo-Dog a vaults best friend.” Apparently they were designed to explore the wastes in search of life and safe radiation levels. Never put into production… I guess the bombs came before testing was complete. I found him under a pile of ruble in a ghost town west of what used to be Broken Hills. His CPU was fried and non operational, but I was able to drag him up to Vault City were good ol' four eyes fixed him right up. Pretty useful in the wastes, came fully equipped with Pip-Boy 2000, Geiger Counter, Motion Sensors, and some sharp teeth . Intelligent somuvabitch won’t shut the fuck up sometimes. Keeps me company with all that info downloaded into his mainframe. Dogs more freaking intelligent then me! But what can you except… it’s not like I got to go to school with all the other little kids and learn my ABC.
There is a war raging now. And no, this is not something were the NCR Rangers are waging a campaign against the slavers… No, this is almost like all hell broke loose in hell, as of these wastes are having there own Great War. Bombs would probably have dropped again if it wasn’t for the fact that they were all used to create the paradise in which we struggle to survive in now. With the destruction of the Enclave Oil Rig, the main base of all there operations, a major blow was struck. But the Enclave is a foe not willing to disappear into the wastes. They have been ferociously restructuring themselves and rebuilding there diminishing ranks. What unknown outposts they had east of the NCR Republic have become the new operating bases and training facilities for there army. They have a new agenda now. No more are they planning to wipe out every living form of life and start from scratch. That goal was stopped by a man know as the Vault Dweller in the wastes. There one and only objective now is to topple the Brotherhood of Steel and the NCR Republic and again resume there place as the controlling hand in the waste of California. Even though there army is much smaller then the force of the Brotherhood and the NCR, there technology and firepower is unmatched. There army is still by far the most advanced equipped force in these wastes. Even though the Brotherhood and NCR have technologically advanced weapons they are few and not enough to supply there army with. Thus there great numbers are still unmatched to the Enclave’s superior energy and heavy weaponry.
We are heading to the last inhabitable wasteland in the south. A small military outpost used by the Brotherhood and NCR called Border. Word is that the two organizations are recruiting men who are trained and already equipped for battle. Supposedly top dollar is to be paid for these experienced mercenaries. I guess will see what kind of price me and RD can fetch… and who knows, maybe I’ll find some kind of meaning there…
***Let me know what you guys think and what I should change or improve on... OR hell just tell me if it's any better then the rough draft***
PROLOGUE
It never changes. The wastes that is… Seems like everything around you just gave up on life… gave up on trying. Mother earth took its final blow and its heart stopped beating. My name is Jack… just Jack no last name and no legacy behind me. I was born in the New Reno alleys… my mom was a working girl, a Reno whore. She was murdered by a customer right there in front of me after he had his way with her. He let me live, sick bastard got off on me watching my mother die. I’ve been traveling these wastes for 3 years in search off nothing. I left Reno after realizing that there was nothing there for me. I guess I was kind of hoping I’d find something better, but as time passes I gave up on that to. Don’t know how old I am or what year I was born. That kind of stuff just doesn’t hold any meaning in this world anymore. I know I’m younger then most judging by everyone’s crisp radioactive treated skin. I travel with my only companion that I picked up in the beginning of my travels. A half robot half wolf cybernetic dog, a Vault Tek prototype. I call him R.D. because of the faded sign on him “Robo-Dog a vaults best friend.” Apparently they were designed to explore the wastes in search of life and safe radiation levels. Never put into production… I guess the bombs came before testing was complete. I found him under a pile of ruble in a ghost town west of what used to be Broken Hills. His CPU was fried and non operational, but I was able to drag him up to Vault City were good ol' four eyes fixed him right up. Pretty useful in the wastes, came fully equipped with Pip-Boy 2000, Geiger Counter, Motion Sensors, and some sharp teeth . Intelligent somuvabitch won’t shut the fuck up sometimes. Keeps me company with all that info downloaded into his mainframe. Dogs more freaking intelligent then me! But what can you except… it’s not like I got to go to school with all the other little kids and learn my ABC.
There is a war raging now. And no, this is not something were the NCR Rangers are waging a campaign against the slavers… No, this is almost like all hell broke loose in hell, as of these wastes are having there own Great War. Bombs would probably have dropped again if it wasn’t for the fact that they were all used to create the paradise in which we struggle to survive in now. With the destruction of the Enclave Oil Rig, the main base of all there operations, a major blow was struck. But the Enclave is a foe not willing to disappear into the wastes. They have been ferociously restructuring themselves and rebuilding there diminishing ranks. What unknown outposts they had east of the NCR Republic have become the new operating bases and training facilities for there army. They have a new agenda now. No more are they planning to wipe out every living form of life and start from scratch. That goal was stopped by a man know as the Vault Dweller in the wastes. There one and only objective now is to topple the Brotherhood of Steel and the NCR Republic and again resume there place as the controlling hand in the waste of California. Even though there army is much smaller then the force of the Brotherhood and the NCR, there technology and firepower is unmatched. There army is still by far the most advanced equipped force in these wastes. Even though the Brotherhood and NCR have technologically advanced weapons they are few and not enough to supply there army with. Thus there great numbers are still unmatched to the Enclave’s superior energy and heavy weaponry.
We are heading to the last inhabitable wasteland in the south. A small military outpost used by the Brotherhood and NCR called Border. Word is that the two organizations are recruiting men who are trained and already equipped for battle. Supposedly top dollar is to be paid for these experienced mercenaries. I guess will see what kind of price me and RD can fetch… and who knows, maybe I’ll find some kind of meaning there…
***Let me know what you guys think and what I should change or improve on... OR hell just tell me if it's any better then the rough draft***